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I don't know how anyone else feels about this since the majority of us sing cover songs for the Showcase, but does anyone write their own lyrics that they've submitted and want to share? I know I have lyrics that I'd love to have critiqued by ya'll... just a thought.

[glow=white]Amanda[/glow]

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hi, i've written a few songs, and subbed them on here over a period of time, but what i did was...i would find a music track i had no clue as to how the song went and write my own words to it...is that cheating?  naaaaaa....

plus i love taking songs and changing them to the way ( I )want them sung...thats fun to....i wouldn't say i'm a writer my no means but when i'm bored its fun....love to hear some of ur songs and i would be honest if thats what you want....and i think it is....i hope......

Thats pretty much all I sub on SS. Once in awhile I send one of a regular karoake song. But primarily I only send original compositions(blues mostly, some swing and jazz) of my lyrics and vocal arrangements recorded over either karaoke instrumentals or blues/swing or jazz instrumentals. Blues is usually Chicago, west coast or jump blues.

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"You know that I sing the Blues and I do not suffer fools. When I'm on that silver mic, it's gonna cut ya, just like a knife"-The SWINGCAT

I have not subbed anything I have personally written, but I have subbed a song that was written by a good friend of mine.  He wrote both the music and lyrics. He took a rough recording of the music along with the sheet score to KMA studio in Nashville where he had studio musicians make a track of the music.  I then recorded the song at a local studio here in Texas.  I actually get radio air play on this song quite often and he was inducted into the Songwriter's Hall of Fame about 3 months later. Not because I recorded his song, but because of his success at writing. Not long ago, I subbed that song here on SS for everyone to hear.--Mike

Well, I don't want to take someone else's music, but I can't write my own either. I know it's really hard to judge or critique lyrics by just reading them, not listening to them. I usually just have my bf sit down with me after I write some, and he lets me know what he thinks. He usually just says that I write too poetic; that is, I naturally write in iambic pentameter, rhymed verse, etc. It's kinda been hard for me to stray away from the "poem-y" sounding stanzas.

Here's a set that I actually wrote recently. I add notes to myself in sometimes, like where I'd want an instrumental, or whatever...

"Was once a little girl
Surrounded by a troubled world
Reassurance always seemed
Forever far away

Promises you never kept
I’d sit out on the back porch step
I still remember, pushing back
Tears I grew to hate

And I don’t want to make you hurt the way I did
I know you feel your own pain too
But I just can’t spend my life
Believing all your lies
I love you Dad
Yes, I still do

A letter came in the mail today
Postmark some prison in the U.S.A
Another story, it’s not your fault
Guess you haven’t changed

(Instrumental)

Through all these years I kept my anger locked inside
And now I’m faced with growing up
I thought I’d cried all the tears that I could cry
But lately I’ve been crying way too much
And with this pain there comes a truth
I can’t heal the broken you
But I can pray
And I can say
I love you"

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JMO but i think its excellent writing, it says so much in so few words, all the hurt, pain...very impressed...Billy

Here's an example of some of my blues/swing stuff that I write and have subbed on SS:

Set to a west coast/chicago blues swing

OLD BRE'R RABBIT
By: Kurt Johnson Copyright Swingcat Publishing(TM) (C) 7-26-2005

Like old Brer Rabbit,  just sly as a fox
Gettin outta jams with real smooth talk
Dont throw me in yonder briar patch sir
Toss me on in Im gone like a blur

Like old Brer Rabbit
Too Slick on my feet (Refrain 1)
Leave law in the dust
Gonna beat dat heat

Like old Brer Rabbit
Real fast on my feet
Step ahead da law      (Refrain 2)
Im gonna beat dat heat

(Refrain 1, 2)

Cops wanna break me, try to make it stick
Smooth line and a wink oughta do the trick
Searchin all over, try to catch up to me
I'm livin life large,  just gotta be free

(Refrain 1, 2)

I shimy and shake when I give em the slip
Like old Brer Rabbit Im just way too slick
Bobbin and weavin the cant hit me
Flash cash & style Im a sight to see

(Refrain 1)

They's hot on my tail gonna eat my dust
Gotta live life free in that we trust
Runnin like the wind they cant catch me
Toss me in the briar patch now set me free

(Refrain 1, 2)

(Refrain 1)

They aint gonna catch me now

They show nuff' can try

They'll never catch me.............UH UH!

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"You know that I sing the Blues and I do not suffer fools. When I'm on that silver mic, it's gonna cut ya, just like a knife"-The SWINGCAT

great songs you two!!

Here's one I wrote about a friend of mine who passed away in her sleep after being married just 6 months.... she was two months pregnant. Her two best friends are UNBELIEVABLE violinists and they played at her funeral. She used to sing along with the violins regularily at church, but at her funeral they just played.

Crying Strings

I’ll never forget that day
When my mama told me the news
She was like a sister and she’d only just been wed
There inside her belly
was a budding little boy
She went to sleep one night, but she would never wake

Oh, the violin, it played
And the bow, it slowly swayed
The echo of her voice still rings
As we listen to the crying strings

I remember all those faces
Long with tears and sorrow
And the flowers around her picture framed her pretty face
In her casket was a teddy bear
From her mama with a note
‘This is for you, little one because Grandma loves you too’

Oh, the violin, it played
And the bow, it slowly swayed
The echo of her voice still rings
As we listen to the crying strings

Well I know she’s watches down on us no matter what life brings
But I still shed a tear for her when I hear those crying strings

Oh, the violin, it played
And the bow, it slowly swayed
The echo of her voice still rings
I know she’s in those crying strings

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you guys should find an intrumental track and record them and sub them to SS.

Just hook up your karaoke player to the puter and then record them on AUdacity and save/export them as MP3's. It works really well.

Then the next step is to make your own karaoke disc with your own words on the screen and own pictures in the background.

Karaoke Builder Studio will do that. I'm working on learning how to do that so I can go out and Karaoke to my own swing and blues compositions---like the Old Brer Rabbit song.

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"You know that I sing the Blues and I do not suffer fools. When I'm on that silver mic, it's gonna cut ya, just like a knife"-The SWINGCAT

Crystal, I love the part of your song where it talks about the violins. Very sweet.

I do have audacity, that's what I record my subs with, but I just can't see taking another songs instrumental track and putting my words to it... Idk maybe I should try it.

I'm not very familiar with swing, but I like the lyrics to your song too Kurt. It has a very upbeat feeling to it. It sounds like something I would listen to.

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